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I see her face from that morning
and the tears that fall
I hear her crying out her troubles
I hear it all

Her eyes don't have the usual brightness
Her mouth doesn't have the usual smile
She has to make a decision now
To leave or be left behind

She wants to see something beautiful
Something to live for
And to die for
Something that will save her
Something that will end her plight

She wants to meet to meet someone special
Someone to say that it's all over
Someone to say it's just begun
A gun in one hand,
A rose in the other
Someone to fight,
Someone to love

So I went a little closer
I wanted to kiss her
And I wanted to slap her
I didn't know what to do
Because the truth is, I felt the same way too

I remembered what happened
As I drove back home
It reminded me of something important:
That I could live one more eternity
If I kept my eyes on the road
So I looked out the window

And crashed.
©2005-2009 ~diablong-buang
:icondiablong-buang:

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One of my simplest poems. Hope you'll like it. Sorry, I can't think of any good lines now.

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:icondesolate-wonder:
I'm not so good with words,(in praise) but I had to say something.
I like it. There's something so delicate about this and a sense of a heavy heart.
Beautiful yet sorrowful. I love how the whole thing "crashed" to a stop with the last line.
(Did I make any sense?)

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"I would have as soon died as breathe
before I knew to breathe for you."
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~Alix
:icondiablong-buang:
haha im glad you liked it.

:D

--
Don't look ahead, just run to me
Each step will find the next one, recklessly
We'll find ourselves on the safest ledge
Well pardon me, I couldn't help myself
-- Copeland - On the Safest Ledge --

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:icondesolate-wonder:
Yea, I did. :D

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"I would have as soon died as breathe
before I knew to breathe for you."
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Click Me!, I'm a member!

~Alix
:iconflyawaywithme:
i quite like it also

--
we were but stones, your light made us stars
she puts the weights into my little heart.
:icondiablong-buang:
i'm glad you liked it :D

--
Don't look ahead, just run to me
Each step will find the next one, recklessly
We'll find ourselves on the safest ledge
Well pardon me, I couldn't help myself
-- Copeland - On the Safest Ledge --

*Letters-Words-Write ~writeaway
:iconnerdyglam:
I like the description of the girl and what she wants. I also like how the 2nd to the last stanza is long but the last stanza is simply two words.
:icondiablong-buang:
thanks for the comment! :D

--
Don't look ahead, just run to me
Each step will find the next one, recklessly
We'll find ourselves on the safest ledge
Well pardon me, I couldn't help myself
-- Copeland - On the Safest Ledge --

*Letters-Words-Write ~writeaway
:iconmidnight-dreaming:
wow very deep and thought-provoking, I love it :D

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:icondiablong-buang:
glad you liked my work :D

--
Don't look ahead, just run to me
Each step will find the next one, recklessly
We'll find ourselves on the safest ledge
Well pardon me, I couldn't help myself
-- Copeland - On the Safest Ledge --

*Letters-Words-Write ~writeaway

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